genie camera
So one time there were two people named Jimmy and John had a brown camera that Jimmy got for him on there 12 birthday and John was worried because every night the camera would move by itself it was hard to tell people something was wrong with the camera. He had went to the zoo and took a pictures of a beautiful animal and when I went home something came out of the camera at first I thought I was dreaming but I wasn't a sleep so I was freaking out he told me he was a genie and I wished for everything and the genie was my only friend.
A really nice narrative piece! Some great imagination. I really like the straight forward description, which gives the piece a real life feel. Good use of capital letters and apostrophes. Perhaps add some more descriptive vocabulary. Keep up the good work!
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